Pat Mills Wins Flash Fiction Challenge

Pat Mills is the Readers’ Choice in this week’s Indies Unlimited Flash Fiction Challenge. The winning entry is decided by the popular vote and rewarded with a special feature here today. (In the case of a tie, the writer who submitted an entry first is the winner per our rules.) Without further ado, here’s the winning story:

Dog Under Door
Photo copyright K. S. Brooks. Do not use without attribution.

by Pat Mills 

Abigail had a big softball problem: she couldn’t throw, she could barely catch, and she couldn’t hit!

“Why did we move to a town where everybody plays baseball?”

“You know we’re a military family,” her mother said.

“I know…”

“This town has a great baseball family, and one family member made it famous by setting a unbelievable baseball record.”

Abigail’s team lost -again! Her father sent her a letter from overseas, telling her it was ‘okay’ to be an ‘underdog’. She promised to keep trying.

Then, Abigail noticed her neighbor has a new dog-different from her ‘champion’ dogs.

“Hi,…good boy,” she said, petting him.

“Careful!” Mrs. Horton warned, “He is too unruly! I don’t let him fraternize with my other dogs.”

“Can I walk him?”


Abigail decided to help Max compete with Mrs. Hortons’ champions!

Max’s obedience skills, and Abigail’s softball skills improved. “Abigail, who is helping up your game?” Coach asked. “A friend…”she said.

Then, one day, Abigail didn’t come home; and Max was missing!

The police found them. “Look Mom! Max won a trophy in his obedience class, and my friend helped me to win these patches: ‘most improved’ and ‘first home run’,” she smiled.

“Who is this friend?”Her mother frowned.

“The man you told me about…” Her mother’s eyebrows rose. “…the famous baseball player and his son, they adopted a new dog-it was in Max’s class.”

“Now, Max and I aren’t underdogs anymore!”

Author: Administrators

All Indies Unlimited staff members, including the admins, are volunteers who work for free. If you enjoy what you read here - all for free - please share with your friends, like us on Facebook and Twitter, and if you don't know how to thank us for all this great, free content - feel free to make a donation! Thanks for being here.

One thought on “Pat Mills Wins Flash Fiction Challenge”

  1. Congratulations, Pat! It was a close contest, with a lot of good stories. I enjoyed reading yours. At first, I was not inspired by the great big door, but when I realized that a dog’s nose was peeking out from under it, that piqued (no pun intended) my interest. Some of the photos really do that. I think many writers had fun with this one. I liked your happy ending.

Comments are closed.