Today we’re pleased to announce the winner of the 14th weekly Flash Fiction competition at Indies Unlimited.
The winning entry is rewarded with a special feature here today and a place in our collection of winners which will be published as an e-book at year end.
A total of 51 votes were cast in the contest this week. The winner (with 28% of those votes) is our very own David Antrobus.
Congratulations to David, and thanks to everyone who participated – excellent entries! Now, without further ado, (release the celebratory bats) here’s the winning entry:
Og Hunts
by David Antrobus
Og lonely. Wish had friend.
Wait. Deer! Og move slow, get close to deer. Drum inside chest pounding. Breathe slow. Jump up and throw rock. Og miss, but deer not run away. No. Deer run toward. Head down. Og surprised. Catches Og’s loincloth with pointy head spears. Tries to shake Og off. Can’t. Og’s teeth and bones hurt. Deer panics, runs into water. Og breathing water. Og scared. Notices log. Tries to grab it. Not log. Log with teeth. Log bites deer on leg and starts to spin. Og spins too. Loincloth rips. Og naked. But Og free. Deer not so lucky. But here come other logs with teeth. Fight over deer. Og doesn’t think. Og wishes Og thinks more. Og grabs bloody part of deer and runs, heads for cave. Thinks tribe will like him again now. Make friends. Piece of deer is almost deer.
Arrive at cave. Tribe home. Og smiles. Tribe look at Og naked and laugh. But then not laugh. Tribe look over Og’s shoulder. Og and bleeding deer gut trail been followed by big cat with mouth spears. Tribe scream. Run. Big cat with mouth spears eat two of tribe, Glug and Grog. Tribe sad.
Next day, Og lonelier. Og hunting far away. Very far. No rocks this time. Sunburn in bad place.
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Woo hoo, awesome! Congtatulations, David! Og pleased!
Oops. "Congratulations," meant to say. Small keyboard plus bagel with peanut butter not a good idea.
Now Og hungry. 🙁
Loved it David. Congrats.
Thanks, Yvonne. It was fun this week.
Og not laughing. But I am! Congratulations, David.
Poor Og. With his winnings, he's gonna buy some aloe vera.
A complete, action filled, character driven story that is both tragic and funny in just over two hundred words. Quite superb, David, well done.
You are very kind, and thank you!
This is great David! Congratulations!
Thanks, Danielle!
That's so funny!
Og go get tea now… og og
Thanks, Vickie!