Victoria Ann Carr Wins Flash Fiction Challenge

Congratulations to Victoria, whose entry won this week’s Indies Unlimited Flash Fiction Challenge.

The voter-selected story is recognized with a special feature here today and wins a place in our 2014 Flash Fiction Anthology, which will be published as an e-book when this year’s challenges are completed.

Without further ado, here’s the winning story:


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Yellowstone Raven
photo by K.S. Brooks

Raven Mockers
by Victoria Ann Carr

Not only could I see the inky, black silhouette of the raven, but also I hear his portentous cries across the baleful, indigo sky! A pertinacious orator, jetty black plumage, a powerful wingspread, with a heedful warning. Raven he’ll be cryin’, when the Mockers come a knockin’, for silently they tread! Never leave the infirmed or dying alone, endangered in their beds! At least that is what I was taught by the old shaman who lived deep in the woods. As the others celebrate unaware—I remain an obscurantist, well versed in these ancient teachings. Crass materialism has brought a plague of gross ignorance to matters of spiritual warfare.

Evil was lurking—concealed from the revelers’ sight. I began to sense the approach once cued by the Raven’s cry to battle. Vitality is what they steal—dark enemies to the warriors of light— I am a warrior of light! Invisible—these black-hearted shamans—sneak inside, and without a single mark, they kill and then cut out their victim’s heart. Feasting upon it, they add years to their life—perpetuating this perilous dark medicine!

The raven’s ocular organs were sharply focusing ahead. There an ailing elder was inside, left unattended in his bed. Slinking away from the celebration, I must go immediately to retrieve my medicine bag and prepare for the spiritual vigil and the confrontation to come. Glancing back at the conviviality, I think, Respect and heed the Raven’s portent cry! Evil-doers, the Raven Mockers may be dropping by!

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4 thoughts on “Victoria Ann Carr Wins Flash Fiction Challenge”

  1. Thanks so much for reading my flash fiction. It was a Poe-inspired Native American legend of the Raven Mockers. It began as an acrostic poem but I wasn’t satisfied with the end product. Then I just happened upon this weeks flash fiction contest…saw the picture of the Raven and knew what it was meant to be! Thanks to everyone who voted and all who read my short, short! It was a true pleasure to share it on this site!

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